Thursday, September 4, 2008

Query!!!!! (I'm excited)

Well, here it is, my first attempt at a query for Miss Midas. I feel pretty good about it, but I have high hopes that, with your help, I can polish her till she shines. Heck, I may even get up enough nerve to submit this to EE . . . maybe . . .after you guys help me first. :)Okay. . . here goes(for a limited time only):

See above for revised version.


Renee Collins said...

just tweaked a few things . . . hope no one was in the midst of submitting a comment.

anyway. . . carry on.

*gulps* I'm unreasonably nervous.

Kiersten said...

Okay, darling, I've got a killer killer headache. Natalie is going to do a run-through tonight, and then I'm going to look at the second draft tomorrow, okay? I'm a useless lump when I feel like this, and you deserve headache free Kiersten ; )

Natalie said...

I'm emailing you, Renee. I think this is a stellar star, but a little wordy. You say the one touch thing like three or four time. Once is good.

Though really--great first run!

Renee Collins said...

Ah, you two are wondrous. Thanks so much.

Natalie, I have one last favor. If it's not too much trouble, would you mind sending your version of the query in the body of an email. Otherwise, I'll have to run to the library to open the attachment.

I'm very excited that you shaved off a bunch of words. I did the word count and it was 350. That is awfully close to the edge of Nathan Bransford's ideal limit (200-400) so I knew I needed to slim it down. You rock!

And Kiersten, totally, you take as long as you need. I am still not done with editing, so there is no rush on this. Hope you feel better.

Renee Collins said...

Nevermind Natalie, I somehow managed to open it. Hurray! I'm pumped.

Terri Tiffany said...

I hope it goes well!! You must be so excited to be at this point!!! yay!! I'll check back to see how you did.

Joanne said...

You must be so excited ... Keep us posted on the status. Fingers crossed for you!